by Tamara Shaffer from the May 28, 2012 issue
Tagline: A quiet evening and a chance meeting, and two lonely people get a second chance for love...
In A Nutshell: After getting divorced from her husband, Cerise works cleaning offices at night to make ends meet. She meets a widower who is working late to catch up. They hit it off.
Observations: There wasn't a lot of witty banter or humor in this story. The setting wasn't quirky, nor did I detect any odd coincidences. It was just a sweet, quiet, solid story of two people meeting.
As I've said before, when you have a character with a history to get over, it's best not to dwell too much on it. This character's husband left her for another woman. That had to be really tough. But in Woman's World stories, you want to communicate that backstory as matter-of-factly as you can, like Shaffer did.
Charlie is four and I've been cleaning offices since his dad left us for a woman he met at the office where he worked.
"Office romances are a bad idea,"my mom says.
That one was certainly bad for me. I've gotten over the heartbreak, but I had to take this job when he left, and cut my college classes down to just two per week.
Another thing I noticed about this story was that it covered four nights, four meetings, four chances for them to connect. The first night, they meet. The second night they exchange names and he shares some personal information. Third night, she does the same. Fourth night, he buys her a Kit-Kat and asks her to dinner.
It's easy to see a real relationship starting this way.