Friday, October 25, 2013
Tagline: Molly's favorite things were running and reading. So why bother with a party where there was zero chance she'd meet a man with the same interests?
In a Nutshell: Molly doesn't want to go to a party, but she does anyway. There, she meets a man and almost doesn't recognize him as the guy she often runs past at the park. They find out they have a lot in common.
Observations: After I finished this story, I really felt as if I'd been to a party. I could immediately identify with Molly because I, too, dislike going to parties where I know almost no one. I, too, am critical of food (but I'm not a restaurant critic!)
I thought it was cute how she nicknamed the people she saw at the park and then ran into "The Blue Streak" at the party.
It might have been funnier if she'd omitted the sentence in between the two lines of dialogue. Comedy is all about timing, and I think that long delay between the set-up and the punchline is too long here.
Original: "I try not to run in heels." I smiled into the blue eyes that had inspired his nickname. "It's rough on the ankles."
Revised: "I try not to run in heels." I smiled up at him. "It's rough on the ankles."
Photo by Tobyotter (cc)