Tagline: Laura couldn't keep her dog from running away. Fortunately, he never ran far...just to Matt's house!
In a Nutshell: A dog plays matchmaker when he keeps running away to the house that a cute single guy is restoring.
Observations: Since this is the second story I'm analyzing today and I have limited time, I'm going to do a Stream-of-Consciousness Review ™. LOL.
The first couple of paragraphs are good. I, too, rescued a dog, so I'm immediately drawn in and feel a connection with the narrator. I also feel sympathy for her having just been dumped by her fiancé. Poor thing.
Oh. Teeny is a Great Dane. Holy moly. I have a Chihuahua. Polar opposites!
Hm. I wonder what kind of neighborhood she lives in if there are Victorian houses sitting around abandoned. But I go with it.
OMG. LMAO. "I'm not sure, but after that kiss, I think Teeny and I are going steady."
I like seeing the progression of their relationship, via Teeny's messing up the porch and shirt.
I really liked the invitation, but I kind of wonder if he could have restored the house in two weeks. Glory is a strong word.
LMAO again at Matt's outfit for the BBQ.
Hm. I am disappointed with the ending. It felt very abrupt. I think it might have helped if right after he said, "And I do want to get to know you better, Laura," she had said something and they'd shared a moment. Instead there was "telling," of the "show don't tell" fame. "That was the day I fell in love with Matt. Thanks for telling us, but I'd rather see it happen real time.
Oh, a wedding. That' makes sense, but it falls flat for me because I don't feel the couple has a strong enough connection built.
The last sentence was terrific, but I'm afraid it didn't make up for the lack of of happy sigh at the critical place in the story.