April Knight from the January 4, 2016 issue
Tagline: Lindsay liked helping people, so when her neighbor asked for a favor, how could she say no?
Observations: I liked this story. I identified with the heroine, Lindsay, because I used to say yes to all sorts of things and over-commit. Now, I say no and I'm much less stressed. But back to Lindsay.
Writing a character like Lindsay, who is a helpful person, can be tricky. You don't want a doormat character that people roll their eyes at and turns readers off, rather than entice them, but I think Knight did a good job. I felt that Lindsay might have a slight problem, but she hadn't ventured into doormat territory yet.
Giving a character quirks or slight problems to overcome helps the characters seem more real and three-dimensional. In a super short story like the ones in Woman's World, I wouldn't say it's mandatory if only because you have so few words to work with, but in general, rounded characters help the story feel richer.
I laughed a lot reading this story. For instance here:
"You don't have a big, yellow tiger cat?"
"I don't have a cat of any color."
I think it would have been a teensy bit funnier if there had been a beat after the word 'cat.'
"You don't have a big, yellow tiger cat?
"I don't have a cat," Cooper said. "Of any color."
I liked their banter a lot, especially the part where Cooper explains what he's been thinking...
"...the fact is, I've been wanting to ask you out, but I was afraid it might be awkward. If you said no, then I'd be embarrassed. If you said yes and we didn't hit it off, we might start avoiding each other and things would get all weird and uncomfortable. I'd start climbing in and out of my bedroom window to avoid meeting you in the hallway, and you'd start wearing crazy disguises. And then I might have to move, and I haven't even finished unpacking yet."
I always love humor in a Woman's World story.
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