June 13, 2016 issue
Tagline: Jenna isn't a natural at jogging...but the cute runner and his dog keep her going!
Observations: I loved this story for many reasons.
I really identified with Jenna. I hate running and this paragraph was funny...
The fact that I'm running at all is a miracle. I'm a nurse whose exercise routine has mostly consisted of carrying fast food up two flights of stairs to my apartment after a 12-hour shift.
So, the premise of the story is that Jenna is a proactive woman. She sets goals and she meets them. It's fun to see her try to meet the cute runner, and fail. We've all been there. We've all told ourselves we're going to do something and then chicken out. So we feel for her.
Here was another bit that had me laughing.
The next day I'm back at it, determined to speak to him when we pass. I've practiced running in place and talking at the same time until I can say a few words without supplemental oxygen.
Shortly after that, we have a mid-story turning point, which is a great thing. It's that point in the story where everything is turned on its ear. You think the story is going this one way and then BAM, it switches gears. Brent sprains his ankle and we suddenly have a woman-to-the-rescue story.
It's icing on the cake that he has to put his arm around her to hobble back to his car, right? LOL And then he confesses...
"To tell you the truth, I tripped because I was checking my watch to see when you'd appear."
Score! This shows he's attracted to her as well. Showing the attraction is something I think you should always do in a Woman's World story.
At the end of the story, Jenna overcomes her fear and asks him out. Okay, he already made it clear he'd be amenable, but still, she does it. I think that's a big part of why I enjoyed this story so much--I feel proud of Jenna at the end as well as happy that she's going to go on a date with Brent.
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