from the November 7, 2016 issue
Tagline: Katy didn't think her job at the museum could be better...until she met Logan!
Woman's World Tropes: "Freaky Friday" type switcheroo, matchmaker (sort of)
Observations: I'm going to do a stream-of-consciousness analysis today, which means I'll read it and comment as I go. I've fallen behind with the blog and need to catch up.
A museum is a fun setting and I've always thought those museum sleepovers sounded like fun.
Ah, we have a substitute security guard, who is--surprise!--younger than the normal one.
Hmm. The extended hand-grasp? It felt a teensy bit creepy to me since they just met. I'd have preferred for her to feel a tingle of awareness.
He asks to do a walk-through with her, which struck me as weird. It would seem to me that whomever he's relieving from duty would do that.
Oh, here's a surprise. We end the scene and jump forward in time a few days. I expected to see the whole night with the kids play out.
Awkward use of a word... Just then, the man who'd interrupted her thoughts since Kids' Night approached. Interruption is a brief occurrence, not something that can happen continually over the course of a few days.
Wait, Logan is the new owner of Sterling Security? I'm stopping here for a bit to try to understand the timeline here. Logan is apparently an entrepreneur and has been observing his uncle providing security for the museum for two years and then decides he likes the company enough to buy it? This is strange and confusing enough to pull me out of the story. But I put it behind me and keep reading.
Oh, the matchmaker dad is adorable.
Okay, I liked it with reservations about the fact that Logan was the new owner of the company. If you're a regular follower of this blog, you know I can be a very pragmatic reader and when the facts pull me out of a story, I get cranky. To me, it's important to ground a story in reality so that readers are able to participate in the romantic fantasy without interruption. I would have been happier if Logan had always been the owner. Then, hiring his uncle would have made sense to me. It's the fact that the's the new owner that's tripping me up. It's weird how big a difference one word can make.
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