Tagline: Susan thought she'd never love again...until she met Dan!
Woman's World Tropes: Man to the rescue, independent woman, matchmaker family member, widow, moving on
Observations: There is a great deal of information packed into the first two paragraphs. I haven't talked about this in a while, but backstory dumps are a-okay in Woman's World stories. You don't have time to dribble it in a bit at a time, like you do in a novel. Quick and dirty, ladies! Everything is compressed in an 800 word story.
Here's what Dayton stuffed in there:
- Susan needs a snowblower.
- Susan is new in town and new to Minnesota weather.
- She has a daughter and granddaughter.
- Susan has become a do-it-yourselfer.
- Susan had help with this transformation.
- The helper is single.
After that, still in Act One, she's just as efficient.
- Dan is proactive about helping Susan when she comes to the store.
- Dan and Susan are still dancing around their mutual attraction. ("I wouldn't want to trouble you...")
- Dan makes a subtle move to show he's attracted. ("I really admire how you dove in and tackled all those home projects.")
- They start using first names.
Act Two, we see the plot moving forward when the daughter gives Susan the push she needs.
Act Three, the scene is all set. The reader is just sitting there waiting and hoping it will turn out all right. And it does. Dayton throws in some romance for good measure--Dan snow-blowing a heart in Susan's driveway. Totally adorable.
In my opinion, the story would have ended nicely after he says "All the time in the world" but Dayton went even further and brought back the fact that Dan's face lit up when he smiled, which was mentioned earlier in the story.
This was a well-crafted and enjoyable story.
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