Showing posts with label Rejection. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Rejection. Show all posts

Thursday, October 25, 2012

The Darcy Story

A while back I had posted about a story of mine that got rejected. People said they wanted to read it and I said I would post it. Someone reminded me that I never did, so here it is.


Finding Mr. Darcy

by Kate Willoughby


     Gillian wished that gloves weren’t part of her costume. She was nervous and her hands were sweaty.
     “I’ll never find him,” she said to her friend Sue.
     “Yes, you will. He’s already checked in. Look for a top hat.”
     Sue was an up and coming party planner. This Valentine’s Day costumed mixer was her promotional brainchild, a brainchild that had gone viral within the singles community of Woodland Hills. The rules were simple. If you wanted to go, you paid the fee and RSVP’d online. The catch was that you had to come as one half of a famous pair—Antony and Cleopatra, Clark Gable and Carole Lombard, Bonnie and Clyde, etc. When you arrived at the party, you were supposed to find and dance with your other half.
     Gillian had always loved Jane Austen’s work. Pride and Prejudice was her favorite, so she wanted to go as Elizabeth Bennett, but although she’d posted her character/costume choice early, no one signed up as Mr. Darcy. Finally, on February thirteenth, Sue called—a Mr. Darcy was coming.
     “Thank goodness!” Gillian had exclaimed. Even though Sue had planned other ways for people to mix and meet besides destiny, Gillian had imagined how romantic it would be to interact with a man in Regency clothing and who probably liked Austen as well. She speculated about the type of man he was. Tall, hopefully. Funny. Humble. Not living with his mother.
     Now at last, the moment of truth had arrived. Gillian tried not to be obvious as she made her way around the room, searching, but although she spotted Romeo, Superman, and Indiana Jones, she saw neither hide nor hair of Mr. Darcy. Until...
     “Pardon me,” a voice said behind her.
     Turning, she saw a man magnificently dressed in a cut-away coat, brocade waistcoat and boots. No top hat, but a nicely tied cravat that looked like it might have been a wedding veil in another life.
     “Elizabeth Bennett?”
     She curtsied and managed to stammer, “Y-yes.”
     His smile was warm and his bow, utterly romantic. “I came especially to meet you, Miss Bennett. Would you care to dance?”
     She focused for the first time on the music, a techno club song that didn’t lend itself to the gentility of their costumes. “I’d actually rather talk if you don’t mind,” she said.
     Offering his arm, he suggested they venture outside. The night air felt refreshing as they exchanged real names. She discovered that Thomas had been born and raised in Los Angeles, like she was. He managed a pub not to far from where she lived. She told him about her job as a pre-school teacher.
     “So, let me get this straight. You make a conscious choice to spend the day with small uncivilized children?”
     She laughed. “It’s my job to civilize them. Besides, you make the choice to spend the evenings with intoxicated adults...”
     “Touché,” he said with a wry, Darcy-like smile. “You’re absolutely right.”
     They spent an hour there, away from the party, discussing Jane Austen’s work, more recent fiction (they were both avid readers), and their mutual wish to visit England someday. Just as they were about to go inside, his phone rang.
     After glancing at the screen, he apologized, checked his watch, and texted a reply.
     “I’m sorry,” he said afterward. “My mom wanted to know what time I’d be getting home.”
     Oh, no! Gillian blanched and her heart sank. He did live with his mother. This was a disaster. He was such a mama’s boy he even had a curfew.
     She must have let her emotions show on her face because he frowned. “What’s wrong?” Then it dawned on him. “Oh, it’s not like that. I have my own place. Mom’s recovering from a hernia operation and since Dad passed away and I’m an only child, I’ve been helping her out since she got released from the hospital. In fact, that’s the reason I waited so long to RSVP for this dance. I wanted to make sure she was healing up all right.”
     Smiling in relief, she said, “I think it’s wonderful that you take care of your mother like that. I’m afraid I jumped to the wrong conclusion.”
     “No harm done,” Thomas said, laughing. “Say, my house may not be as grand as Darcy’s, but maybe you could come over next Friday for dinner. Mom should be fine by then and I’d like to show you that book I was talking about.”
     Gillian was happy to accept his invitation. In fact, a few months later, she accepted another of Thomas’ invitations—this time not for dinner, but for a lifetime. The next Valentine’s Day at Jane Austen’s house in Chawton, she and Thomas got married, dressed in the very costumes they’d worn when they first met.

Thursday, August 23, 2012

Really Bummed

So, I got a rejection yesterday for a story I really thought would pass the test. Johnene said "it didn't work for her." Rats!!! I thought it was a super cute story with a built in, draw...it had to do with Jane Austen.

Well, darn. I guess that frees me up to expand it. I really liked the title Finding Mr. Darcy, and thought I could build a novella around it, so now I can.

Wednesday, July 25, 2012

Alas...

A rejection for a story submitted May 9.

Form letter.

Rats.

The good news is that the story I submitted BEFORE that one didn't get rejected yet. I have hope!

Friday, June 29, 2012

Alas, Another Rejection

The day I got back from vacation, I found a rejection from Johnene in the pile of mail. Big sigh. I wasn't surprised about this one. It wasn't one of my better stories, but I'd written it and all I risked was postage and some paper.

I did send two out, though, so I'm crossing my fingers on those. One is for Valentine's Day and one is aimed for the Chinese horoscope issue. Like I said in my cover letter on that one, I've never seen a Chinese horoscope themed romance story, so I hope this will fit the bill! I know my mom would really appreciate seeing a story celebrating our heritage.

Tuesday, May 29, 2012

Rejected Story - Love in Bloom

As requested, here's that story that was recently rejected. :)

“You can’t believe everything you read.”

            Sarah frowned. While she didn’t take that article about divorced women as gospel, it certainly had discouraged her.  According to the magazine, divorcees over a certain age had a slim chance of remarrying.

            “All you have to do is try,” Autumn said. The two women were crafting corsages and boutonnieres. It was prom season and Sarah’s flower shop had been flooded with orders. 

            “What do you mean?” Sarah asked. “I’ve been trying. Didn’t I tell you about that blind date last month?”

            Autumn made a face. “Month being the operative word…” She trailed off, her attention drawn to a car pulling up to the store. “I think you should go on the offense. Make a pass at someone, or at least show him you’re interested. Like Tom, for instance. He’s adorable and no wedding ring. Would you go out with him if he asked you? I think he likes you.”
             
“I don’t know. Maybe.” Sarah tucked some hair behind her ear as an older woman got out of her car and approached the shop. “But don’t get any ideas, Cupid. Tom Kennedy is a good customer and I wouldn’t want to lose him.”

            “Good customers, we have a lot of,” Sarah said. “Boyfriends…? Not so much.”

            The phone rang and Sarah went to answer it while Autumn greeted the customer. “Welcome to Flowers by Sarah. I’m Autumn. How can I help you?”

            The woman smiled. “I’d like to send something to my son for his birthday, but do you have something a little more masculine than a bouquet?”

            Autumn showed her some of the miniature bonsai trees and the woman was thrilled.

“This is perfect. Now, I’d like this to be delivered around six p.m. on Friday—by Sarah herself, if that’s possible. I’ll even pay extra for that if I need to.” At Autumn’s quizzical look, the woman added conspiratorially, “Ever since my husband passed away, my son has sent me flowers every single month. Since he’s always talking about his florist and how pretty she is and I thought, as a mother, it was my duty to…”

            A sudden suspicion bloomed in Autumn’s brain. “If I could have your son’s name, please?”

            “Tom Kennedy.”

            Autumn beamed. “Mrs. Kennedy, let me assure you I understand completely. In fact,” she said, lowering her voice, “if I might make a suggestion, maybe a little dinner would be in order, as well...”

            A few days later, Sarah pulled up to Tom’s house. She was nervous. He was a really nice guy and one that she wouldn’t mind dating. But, she reminded herself this wasn’t a date. It was a delivery and she needed to remain professional.

            When Tom opened the door, his eyes widened in surprise. “Sarah?”

            “It’s me, all right.” She held out the bonsai tree his mother had chosen. “Happy birthday from your mom.”

            “You’re kidding. Wow, it’s beautiful.” A grin appeared on his face and she noticed for the first time his warm brown eyes had flecks of gold.

Another car drove up, and a teenager got out holding a couple of bags. As he got closer, Sarah noticed the food was from her favorite Italian restaurant, Luigi’s, but Tom protested he hadn’t ordered any of it.

“It’s already paid for. By someone named Cupid,” the kid said.

After the teen drove away, Tom turned to Sarah. “You know,” he said, somewhat sheepishly, “this is a lot of food. Are you hungry?”

Deciding to go on the offense like Autumn had suggested, Sarah nodded and minutes later, she was having dinner with him.  He was so easy to talk to, but that was no surprise. They’d chatted before. Tonight though, she found herself watching his face. His eyes were so expressive and they crinkled at the corners when he smiled, which was often. Time flew as they laughed and talked, and at the end of the evening, she thanked him.

His mouth twitched with a wry smile. “You should probably thank my mother,” he said, “because I’m pretty sure she had more than my birthday in mind when she requested that delivery and ordered this food.”

Sarah felt a blush warm her cheeks. “Actually, if you want to know the truth, I’m pretty sure the Cupid who sent this food is my friend Autumn.”

“Autumn who works at your store.” He chuckled and gave her one of his eye-crinkling smiles. “We didn’t stand a chance, did we?”

Sarah gave a happy sigh when he reached out and took her hand. “No, I don’t suppose we did.”

Friday, May 25, 2012

Bad Timing?

Another rejection came in the mail today. It was for "Love in Bloom," my 37th story, set in a florist shop. This one did have a note from Johnene, though.

Sorry this one didn't work for me. We've had a spate of florist stories!

Darn. That happens sometimes. Something else must not have been up to par, otherwise I think she probably would have kept it for future use. Oh well, I still have three more out there.

If people want me to, I'll post the rejected story. :)

Saturday, May 12, 2012

Rejected. Darn!

Got a rejection in the mail a couple of days ago. I was already irritated because my 18 year old son insists on being a backseat driver. So when I saw the rejection, it just added to my bad mood. When I saw the envelope, I got excited, thinking if it was an acceptance, I'd snap out of it right quick. Alas, there wasn't even a hand-written note from Johnene.

I still have two stories out there and I just sent another earlier in the week. I'm determined to sell at least three stories to them this year.

Friday, February 24, 2012

...You Lose Some

Just got a rejection in the mail from a story I'd submitted in November, 2011. :(

Looking at my tracking sheet, I only have one story out there with them now. I'd better submit another one!

Does anyone want to read the reject? I'll post it here if there's interest.

Tuesday, October 25, 2011

Oof. Again.

Got another rejection from Johnene yesterday. It was for a story that was set at New Year's. Darn. Well, there are still two stories out there she can buy!

Friday, July 30, 2010

No Thanksgiving

The Thanksgiving story I submitted got rejected by Woman's World. Alas. Still waiting to hear from the Trues, though.