Tagline: Kristin and Darren shared a passion for coffee, chocolate, cute babies--and who knew what else?
In a Nutshell: Kristin likes Darren, the guy working at the coffee shop. One day after she'd already ordered, she gets a phone call. Her sister is having her baby! A week later, she goes to the cafe and Darren asks her out.
Teaching Moment: Check out the structure of this story: girl has crush on boy, something not too serious happens to drive them apart, girl talks to boy, boy asks her out. :) This is a good structure to follow. Choose the setting where the girl has the crush. Think of the thing that happens. Then put them back together and let the scene flesh itself out. If you can work in a motif, like the "life's bare necessities" that Mostaghni came up with, all the better.
My Favorite Part: "I noticed the name on your credit card the first time you came into the shop." He paused. "Does that sound too stalkerish?"
He's cute, isn't he? I also noticed that he took note of her name the first time he met her, which meant he liked her right away.
4 comments:
Shoot. I was interested to see what you had to say about my story, but it looks like you skipped that week.
Shelli, what story was it, from what week?
A Week Without You
June 16, 2011
Oh, it's in the queue, Shelli. I just haven't gotten to that one yet. I'm a bit behind. :)
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