by Mary Ann Joyce from the December 15, 2014 issue
Jess and Mat might joke around a lot, but their mutual attraction was no act!
In a Nutshell
Jess's sister strong arms her into volunteering to build sets for the community theatre. The other set builder is a hunk. They hit it off.
I know when I read Mary Ann Joyce wrote the story that it's going to be a great one, and I wasn't disappointed.
I was smiling throughout this story. I loved the comparison of Jess's break-up to a bad haircut. Awesome. I loved the banter between the sisters. I LOVE a man in a tool belt. So, thanks Mary Ann for that awesome image. I was cracking up at their playacting--get it? Playacting?
As for a teaching tip, notice how there is a good passage of time that happens in this story. There are four--count 'em, four time transitions.
1. She tells her sister she's not a theatre person and then "So Saturday, we went to the theatre..."
2. "Before long everyone was joking..."
3. "Over lunch one day..."
4. "The next night..."
In my opinion, this passage of time reinforces the feeling that a reader might have that the couple has a good chance of ending up happy with each other. It helps the reader feel like they got a lot more than 800 words.
On a sidenote, this wasn't a holiday story at all. I wonder if that was a choice Johnene made, to give people a break from holiday themed stuff, or if she didn't get enough good submissions of holiday stories. Something to keep in mind. It might behoove people to write some holiday stories now, while you're in a holiday mood and the holiday ideas are bopping around in your head, and submit, because it seems as if the mail room at Woman's World is moving more slowly than it used to.
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