by Debra McNally from the February 2, 2015 issue
After her divorce, Jenny fell into a comfortable but lonely routine. That changed when she met Mac...
In a Nutshell
Determined to get more exercise, Jenny meets a man at the gym.
This story is so special to me because it's one I helped the author with. And here it is! This is so exciting. After I went over the story line by line, Debra revised her story and sold it. AWESOME.
Jenny is the perfect Woman's World heroine--her divorce was a bit of a hurdle, but full of optimism, she's ready to move on with her life.
If you look closely, you'll see a gray moment when they go to their separate locker rooms. Because Mac is trying new gyms, you figure Jenny missed her chance and probably won't see him again. But, Mac comes back, of course, because he's intrigued with Jenny.
Then just as you think things are going to go well, she notices his "World's Best Grandpa" T-shirt. Damn. Black moment. He's married!
Oh, no he isn't! He's actually a widower. Whew. That was close.
The only oddity was that the entire story was present tense, except for the end, where it went past tense. It didn't bother me, but I did notice it.
So, congratulations, Debra! I'm so thrilled I was able to help you sell a story.
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