Tagline: Jessie was shopping for a Father's Day grill when she meets the chrming shop owner, Matt. As they talk, sparks fly!
Stream of Consciousness Observations: Right off the bat we get the main character's goal and motivation: getting a grill for her dad for Father's Day.
The next paragraph really sets the scene and makes me want a grilled hot dog. As an aside, I haven't heard a hot dog referred to as a frank in ages! LOL
"I told you our grill skills were on fire!" -- Love a good dad joke.
"It's my week to have my son..." -- Clever way to tell the reader he's divorced.
"Inside the store, Matt wrote up the sale bill." -- This paragraph shows that you don't have to insert a character's backstory at the front of the story. This is where Ms. McNally decided to tell us about Jessie's living, job and relationship situations.
"...we discovered we had a passion for outdoor cooking--and other things." -- Ha! I bet one of those "other things" is Jessie!
I love how this ended up to be a matchmaker story. Very cute!
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