Tagline: When single dad Carter embarks on a fishing trip, he doesn't expect to meet the cabin's charming owner--or to feel a spark.
Stream of Consciousness Observations: We begin with a scent, a wonderful sensory addition to any story. We often forget to describe things other than the sights and sounds.
Frankie is the owner of the cabin. I suspect Frankie is a gal.
Carter found her beauty so captivating and felt an unexpected jolt of excitement. -- Thank you, Debra, for not making it electricity! If we harnessed all the electricity found in Woman's World romance stories, we could power a Tesla. LOL
Ha! I was right. Frankie is a woman. I love being right. However, just because I correctly predicted this misunderstanding, don't think it's not desirable to do so in your own stories. Mistaken identity is a time-honored trope in Woman's World stories.
He recognized this stir of feelings from a forgotten place in his heart--and it surprised him. -- This moment illustrates a necessary characteristic of a "moving on" story. A character moving on from divorce, the death of a spouse or a break-up, must acknowledge or realize that they are ready to move on. This can be backstory, like when you open the story and the character has already made this decision. Or it can occur in the story, like it did here.
I'm not familiar with fishing, so I don't know what a live well is, but it certainly makes it seem like Debra knows, which is important. When you write about a subject, get your facts and details right because there will be readers who will catch your mistakes.
Yeah, I might be the only person in the world who doesn't like s'mores. LOL
Awww, what a heartfelt ending. Love.
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