by Cora Allen from the September 24, 2012 issue
Tagline: Julia hadn't laid eyes on Cameron Briggs since high school. Ten years later, the sight of him still made her heart beat faster...
In a Nutshell: Julia's grocery cart rolls into another car. When the owner returns, she gives him her insurance information, but is surprised to find out she knows him and had a crush on him in high school. He is the new football coach at Hillbrook High, and he wants to take her to the Homecoming Dance on Friday.
Observations: I'm going to do a stream of consciousness analysis. I haven't done that in a long time.
Oh, the rolling grocery cart. That's happened to me before. Immediately, I feel a sense of camaraderie with this heroine, and then I feel bad for her because her cart damaged someone's car.
I like the hero when he shows up and deals with the situation calmly and rationally. I can see why the heroine would like him.
Ah, I come up against the first "negative" in the story. If this was "the face that had made her swoon from across the room during Chemistry and English Lit. The running back she'd cheered for when he scored a touchdown. The boy she'd dreamed of going to the Homecoming Dance with," then why did she not recognize him? Oh well, I read on.
Cameron, the hero, continues being understanding and says he won't need to call her insurance company because he has a friend who can fix his car. What a nice guy.
Oh, he's getting all flustered asking her out. That is adorable. Love him. And it's the Homecoming Dance? Wow. Great, what I call, circularity--when you introduce something in the beginning of the story and plant the seed, and then sometime later, that seed sprouts.
It's sweet that he wanted to ask her way back when, too, but that little tidbit didn't do much for me emotionally. I didn't quite buy it and I'm not quite sure why.
Ah, nice last line.
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