Tagline: Cherie didn't expect that a crisp winter skate at the lake would have her falling into the arms of a Valentine's Day sweetheart.
Observations: What's more romantic than meeting while ice skating and sipping cocoa? I really liked the setting of this story. I could just picture the twinkling lights, hear the scrape of the skates on the ice and smell the hot chocolate.
My favorite line: "The pickup hockey team is my way to keep from turning into a cold and lonely winter hermit." That made me laugh!
On the flip side, there were three instances of blushing at the end of the story. Having a critique partner read your drafts would be a good way to avoid repetition like this. Or you could always hire me to edit your story for you! 😜
Photo by Elvert Barnes via Flickr CC License
2 comments:
Hi, Kate, good to see your blog. It seems the editors at WW like to see blushing and other extreme physical reactions in the little romance stories. Maybe it wasn't the author who did it in this case. Who is the fiction editor there now? I haven't tried submitting anything there for ages.
Mary Jo, nice to see you! It could very well be the editors adding something. That's always a possibility. Only the author would be able to let us know. The fiction editor now is Maggie Dillard.
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