Catching the Artist's Eye

by Kate Fellowes from the October 6, 2025 issue

Tagline: After Lucy Mulligan's volunteer shift at the library, she never imagined she'd have a 'meet-cute' with a handsome man. But when Harry Peters introduces himself, sparks fly...

Observations: It's always good to paint your main character in a good light and Lucy is a volunteer at the library.

Ah, the gentleman is a true gentleman, allowing her to keep the book they both wanted.

Oh! He's the teacher of her next class! Nice twist I didn't see coming.

I have to love Harry. He's so nice! 

There is a pause at the end in the second to last paragraph that I wanted to point out because it really adds to the moment. Indulge me and read the last two paragraphs as is, with the pause, and then read them again skipping over the ellipsis like it isn't there. Do you see what I mean? It adds some emotion to the scene that the story really benefits from. It's kind of crazy how much three dots can do.

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A Pizza Party 'Plus One'

by Jennifer Anne F. Messing from the September 29, 2025 issue

Tagline: When Cerise Campbell hosts her daughter's birthday, handsome single dad Jordan steps in to help...and love is on the menu.

Stream of Consciousness Observations: "They turned onto Iris Lane, which was shaded by trees with leaves in brilliant fall colors." -- I'm interested to see if there's a reason the street is specifically named.

"Oh no!" Macie wailed. "Who will deliver our pizzas?" -- This sounds a tiny bit stilted, especially coming from the mouth of a teen.

Oooh, stovetop popcorn is the BEST.

As he picked up one of the big bowls of popcorn [sic] his strong, muscular arm brushed against Cherise's arm and she felt an unexpected, pleasant tingle in her arm. -- This is an example of why reading your story aloud is a good idea. The word arm is used three times, which is, if you ask me, one too many.

Nice story! I especially liked the laid-back plans for the birthday party. These days with Instagram and Pinterest, I feel like so many people feel pressure to dial up their events. Birthdays should be celebrated, but not all of them require photo-inspired fanfare.

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A Sweet Ride to New Love

by Sandra Smith from the September 25, 2025 issue

Tagline: Izzy arrives at the ocal fair expecting a sweet summer outing with friends. Then she meets Jackson--and sparks fly!

Stream of Consciousness Observations: Sandy really immerses us in the atmosphere of a State Fair. I've been to county fairs and, honestly, they're not my favorite. I don't really like any of the types of rides they have and there are so many people. Once I eat my corn dog and funnel cake, I'm ready to go home. LOL But Sandy's writing allows me to enjoy a fair vicariously.

Rule of thumb: it's never too early for a funnel cake!

I've come across the word Midway twice and the capitalization of it has caught my attention both times. I don't believe this should be capitalized unless you're talking about the island. 

Awww. How can you not fall in love with Jackson when he sacrifices his own comfort for Izzy's obvious enjoyment? I also like how Jackson is unfavorably compared to the ex. We see that Izzy is moving on in a positive direction. 

"How about I take you out for food that doesn't come on a stick from a truck?" -- LOL. 

That's a great ending too. Upbeat and optimistic for the future.

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Reeling in New Love

by Debra McNally from the September 22, 2025 issue

Tagline: When single dad Carter embarks on a fishing trip, he doesn't expect to meet the cabin's charming owner--or to feel a spark.

Stream of Consciousness Observations: We begin with a scent, a wonderful sensory addition to any story. We often forget to describe things other than the sights and sounds.

Frankie is the owner of the cabin. I suspect Frankie is a gal.

Carter found her beauty so captivating and felt an unexpected jolt of excitement. -- Thank you, Debra, for not making it electricity! If we harnessed all the electricity found in Woman's World romance stories, we could power a Tesla. LOL

Ha! I was right. Frankie is a woman. I love being right. However, just because I correctly predicted this misunderstanding, don't think it's not desirable to do so in your own stories. Mistaken identity is a time-honored trope in Woman's World stories.

He recognized this stir of feelings from a forgotten place in his heart--and it surprised him. -- This moment illustrates a necessary characteristic of a "moving on" story. A character moving on from divorce, the death of a spouse or a break-up, must acknowledge or realize that they are ready to move on. This can be backstory, like when you open the story and the character has already made this decision. Or it can occur in the story, like it did here.

I'm not familiar with fishing, so I don't know what a live well is, but it certainly makes it seem like Debra knows, which is important. When you write about a subject, get your facts and details right because there will be readers who will catch your mistakes.

Yeah, I might be the only person in the world who doesn't like s'mores. LOL

Awww, what a heartfelt ending. Love.

Walking into Love

by Wendel J. Potter from the September 15, 2025 issue

Tagline: When Rachel spots a handsome crossing guard while walking her nephew to school, their instant connection is serendipitous!

Stream of Consciousness Observations: Aw, her nephew is a first-grader. I used to teach first grade. That's a fun age. They're actually still excited to go to school.

Oh, she's starting a new job at a care home--after she met the attractive crossing guard whom hoped she'd see again that afternoon. Betcha he works there.

Okay, I was wrong. He doesn't work there, but his grandfather is a resident! I'll count that as a win.

They're eating lunch in the dining room? Why is a guest allowed to eat there? I mean he probably can, but for a fee, but that's not mentioned, so I am briefly pulled out of the story to ponder this. It's a good idea to try anticipate these types of questions so they can stay riveted by your brilliant prose. :)

Playing for Keeps

by Marcella Robinson from the September 8, 2025 issue

Tagline: When Gayle faces handsome retired firefighter Ray on the pickleball court, they strike up some serious competition--and chemistry.

Stream of Consciousness Observations: Ooh, I want to know where to get coconut-scented sunscreen. I love that smell! My sunscreen always just smells like chemicals. :(

Ah, it's a hate-to-love story. And I don't blame Gayle. I don't like cocky guys either.

Oh, but Ray's a firefighter. Yum.

Wait, they have a history? He saved her house???? Girl, how can you find him infuriating? 

All right, we have a paragraph explaining how she acknowledges the history but still finds his competitive streak irritating. I'm okay with her state of mind now. It's important to make your characters likable. Up until this paragraph I was finding her a little immature.

LOL. This story is a mild roller coaster for me. I'm shaking my head that she just glared at him just because he winked at her. 

"...he's more like a storm on the horizon than a ray of sunshine." -- Ha! Pun intended? 

Ah, another trope...man to the rescue! Who doesn't want a handsome, strong firefighter to carry her in his arms? Wistful sigh.

Okay, nice story! I love pickleball. If only my day job doesn't already give me "tennis elbow."

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Puppy Love

by Kimberly Kirkland Absher from the August 18, 2025 issue

Tagline: When Holly unexpectedly keeps running into Jake at the vet's office, the duo decide it must be fate--and soon romance begins.

Stream of Consciousness Observations: Huh, my MIL had a dog named Daisy! I thought "the man" was the vet because a vet hero is definitely a popular trope, but I was wrong.

LOL at "This is getting suspicious."

Okay, this was a cute story. Nothing in particular stood out to me. Oddly, I caught a glimpse of the bra strap of the woman in the picture and now I can't unsee it. LOL

Also, I apologize for the absence. I fell behind on the blog and then left for a 2-week trip to Greece which was amazing. Hope to catch up soon, so expect a lot of stream of Consciousness analyses. :)

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