Tagline: Amy didn't think she'd ever find Mr. Right--until she met a gorgeous guy at the antiques mall!
Observations: Ah, the antiques mall. What a fun place to bop around and it's the perfect Woman's World type place to find romance. There's that Americana, Normal Rockwell atmosphere that really resonates with the readers of WW.
I found a few things to comment on, which is always a relief. LOL Sometimes I read a WW story and have nothing to say about it.
There was a bit of a repetition in the beginning...
Amy had all but given up on finding true love. She didn't even want to talk about it to anyone...
Then a couple paragraphs down...
"I know you don't want to talk about it, dear, but I know there's someone out there just for you!"
There was also some repeating at the end.
"How about we go to lunch and then to my grandfather's lock shop?"
and
"Great," he said. "Let's go have lunch, and then we'll stop by my grandfather's store to find a key for that box."
This may have been on purpose for emphasis, but it read repetitive to me. If it was an error, it gives me the opportunity to suggest you find at least one person who can critique and proofread your stories for you. Sometimes we miss things like this because we're too close to the story.
Hendrickson fooled me in this story. When the granny spouted a saying, I thought for sure the saying would show up again the the last sentence of the story, but it didn't. LOL
I loved it when Nicholas said "Don't leave. I'll be right back." There's a hero with just the right amount of assertiveness. He's also a great grandson, obviously. I also LOVED when the grannies exchanged that secret smile. ADORABLE.
All in all, a solid story that I enjoyed.
Photo credit: Paul Sableman via Flickr Creative Commons License
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