Stream of Consciousness Observations: I already like the conversation between Tracey her her daughter. It sounds very realistic. Mara's horror when Tracy announces she's coming along was funny. I found myself siding with Tracey because why go out into that freezing weather twice?
Oh, oops. LOL Somehow she was looking out the kitchen window and then was eyeing the skates at the back of the closet.
"It's like riding a bike...on ice." LOL
Wait, they're outside? Okay, this Southern California girl has only been to ice rinks that are inside buildings, so that's what my brain was conjuring.
I'm totally laughing at this:
"So...come here often?"
Tracey groaned. "Is that a pickup line?"
"It will be if you fall down again."
OMG hilarious.
The rest of the story was perfect. Really romantic, with more witty banter and returning to phrases..."teen patrol" and "mom patrol" and "double axel" and "triple Lutz."
I'm also realizing that Radcliffe cleverly snuck in a character arc for the daughter, who went from recalcitrant and resentful of her mom to encouraging.
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3 comments:
Loved everything about his story. We have outdoor ice skating here in NJ.
This was a great story. Very well written.
I did enjoy this story. I need to go back an reread all these stories again.
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