Tagline: When Lindsay dashes to the store for a missing ingredient, she doesn't expect to bump into her neighbor...or to spark something new.
Observations: A perfect story. I have no notes on it except good ones.
First, we have great characterization in the form of list-making Lindsay. This trait is threaded throughout the story. We see it really established at the beginning. It's mentioned again in the middle of the story...
Lindsay laughed. "It's right here on my checklist."
Then, it's mentioned at the end for a third time...
"You're a list person too?"
I think mentioning things three times originates with fairy tales, but it's kind of a time-honored thing that I think readers have come to subconsciously expect. It also feels right, for some reason. What's great in this story is that this third mention also shows that they have something in common.
The second thing I wanted to highlight was that we are shown that Lindsay is ready to move on with her life after a break-up. This is a small but crucial detail when writing a Moving On story, whether it's a break-up or a divorce. The character must be ready or else, in the backs of our minds, we readers will not be sure the romance will ever go anywhere. This readiness can already be established or it can be shown in the story, as in:
Over a year? Already?
...maybe Paige was right after all. Maybe it was time to try.
Photo by DC Central Kitchen via Flickr CC license
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