Tagline: As Gabby helps her grandmother prepare for the Cinco de Mayo festival, a delivery leads to an unexpected connection and new romance.
Observations: I'm a foodie, so I enjoy any story that revolves around food. And, boy, this one made me hungry! I appreciate how authentic and accurate the recipe was as well. I could also practically hear the mariachi music as I read the story.
The only note I have is that Gabby stated, "The cooking gene skipped me. But, I can whip up a mean batch of churros." Honestly, churros are going to be a little more difficult because of the deep frying and the fact that you have to pipe the batter into the oil with a pastry bag, but this is a very minor criticism in an otherwise fantastic story.
Also, did you notice that Wills-Raftery used the real collective noun for butterflies? A kaleidoscope!
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5 comments:
I thought this was a great story. I did not know that kaleidoscope is a collection of butterflies. Really good description in the story. I agree about how well she incorporated the food theme. This was another story I have studied to compare to the Cinco de Mayo story I sent in last year. I can see why this one is better.
Thank you, Kate! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the story. I love stories that include food, too! I'm an avid baker, not cook, so I guess that's why she can whip up churros - LOL! And I love that you picked up on my "kaleidoscope!" Thank you again for your fab review!
Thank you, Sandy, for your lovely words! I'm so glad you enjoyed my story!
Yeah, I didn't know it was a kaleidoscope either off the top of my head. I just saw the term and thought..."that's an odd word to use. I wonder if it's the collective noun." I looked it up and it was!
My pleasure. I am always proud when you publish a story.
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