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Tagline: Paul was fishing for his dinner...then he caught Lynne!
Observations: Obviously, this story stood out a bit for being in the male, first person point of view. It was refreshing! It was also another example of a story that goes against my oft offered advice to give the couple more screen time together. This story mainly occurred in Paul's head. We get a very detailed picture of who this man is and we end up liking him.
I liked the surprise of Lynne being the one in the hat, and the moment he spotted the red cap, I knew it was her. Also I wanted you to notice at one point in the story, Paul wondered at the scarcity of women who liked the outdoors. Sure enough, he finds one right under his nose. Crawford didn't feel the need to repeat this info in a sentence like, "Paul knew he and Lynne would spend many a day in the sunshine and fresh air." It wasn't necessary. The reader already knows this is a good match.
5 comments:
I loved this story. I enjoy well-written stories with the mail POV. Diane did a great job.
I liked this story too. And I liked that they were older (with grown children). That plays to the demographic for Woman's World Kate told us about in one of her other lessons. Thank you Diane, I really enjoyed your story.
This was a fun story. I also knew who he was seeing in the red cap. It is nice to have older characters. I remember years ago that WW stories were supposed to have main characters no older than 40. I'm glad that has changed.
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