by Mary Ann and Rakel Joyce from the July 11, 2022 issue
Tagline: When her daughter invites her to a poetry reading, Ellie is shocked to find an old flame waiting for her...and a new chance at love.
Observations: Well, of course Mary Ann Joyce (along with Rakel Joyce) has given us a wonderful story. She is such a skilled writer. You can see it just in this one paragraph where she sees her first love again for the first time in 20+ years...
As Hannah stepped into the bookstore for a night of poetry days later, she stopped suddenly. There, sitting at a small table, was Ethan. His black hair had just the right amount of silver flecks. Suddenly, he looked Hannah's way, and behind his dark-rimmed glasses, she could see his expression change. His half-smile and the butterflies that immediately filled her stomach were exactly as she remembered them.
If you look carefully, you'll see a detailed description of our hero, along with a delicious moment of hope, nostalgia and anticipation as he recognizes Hannah. You've got to get your words to work double-duty because you have so few of them to work with.
This is a perfect second chance story and I encourage you to keep this in a file somewhere for reference.
Photo by David Orban via Flickr Creative Commons License
4 comments:
Great story. Of course we've come to expect that from Mary Ann Joyce. Loved it.
Interesting that she has a co-writer. Sister, daughter?
Thanks so much Pat! The co-writer is my daughter, Rakel. She and I had another story published together in Woman's World, but that was a while ago. She's working on her own projects and we are working on a longer project together too.
Great story, Mary Ann. They are always so good. Glad your daughter is writing, too.
Thanks so much, Sandy! My daughter is a terrific writer--much better than me! We also have the same sense of humor, so it all works!
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