by Wendell J. Potter from the June 17, 2024 issue
Tagline: While on their outing to celebrate Father's Day, Anna and her father have two sweet encounters that soon lead to true love.
Observations: I loved seeing Anna and her dad's relationship. Truth in fact, I'm a little jealous. My dearly departed dad and I weren't close.
I think it was awesome to get a twofer, too! Two romances in one story. I've read all of Mr. Potter's stories and I can say with confidence, they are much improved, which just goes to show you practice makes perfect.
Note the omniscient point of view. I'm not the best at writing this POV. I like to be in one character's head or the other's. But it's nice to see that Woman's World is flexible with points of view.
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5 comments:
I also noticed the omniscient point of view. It was a good story.
I loved this story with the double romance. Noticed that right away.
Now I have to go back and look at the POV. I'm a Nora Roberts' fan so I rarely notice POV in a short story. I do notice when a novel is written in present tense though. Takes me awhile to get into the book.
Overall, a good premise, but the head-hopping took me out of the story.
If WW accepts two POV's, I think they should be as separate scenes.
But that's my opinion. LOL
I love Nora Roberts, Pat! I like JD Robb, too.
Anonymous, I can see how changing points of view might be confusing, but it wasn't so long ago that that was the norm. I'm willing to be you're a romance fan and in the genre of romance, you'll almost never see an omniscient POV, and if that's all you're used to reading, it can be a jarring change.
Kate, what was the norm? Jumping from head to head? I find that amateurish and can't imagine why an editor would allow it. There are more professional methods of indicating "thoughts" or reactions from more than one character. Didn't writers learn about that in English 101?
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